英語日記 2025-08-17

· 英語日記

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Today, I awoke at 9:00 am and ate a banana. Then, I worked out: push-ups, sit-ups, and squats, since my friends and I will be attending the basketball cup on 13th October. Around afternoon, I went to IKEA restaurant and study about the Site Reliability Engineering and the quantum information. In evening, I went to the beauty salon where I used to go. That was refreshing me.

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Today, I woke up at 9:00 a.m. and had a banana for breakfast. After that, I worked out—push-ups, sit-ups, and squats—because my friends and I will be joining a basketball cup on October 13th. In the afternoon, I studied Site Reliability Engineering and quantum information at the IKEA restaurant. In the evening, I went to my usual beauty salon, which felt really refreshing.

指摘

  1. “awoke” —> “woke up”
    • awokeはフォーマルすぎる
  2. “ate a banana” —> “had a banana for breakfast”
    • ate a bananaでもいいけど、後者の方がスムーズで意味がクリア
  3. punctuation with lists
    • push-ups, sit-ups, and squats —> better flow with commas.
    • これ、どういうこと？？
  4. “since my friends and I will be attending” —> “because my friends and I will be joining”
    • sinceでもいいけどbecauseの方が直接的
    • joining a basketball cupの方が英語としては自然
  5. “Around afternoon” —> “In the afternoon”
    • 不自然。ネイティブはIn the afternoonを使う
  6. “study about the Site Reliability Engineering and the quantum information” —> “studied Site Reliability Engineering and quantum information”
    • study aboutはしばしば不必要。単純に*study [topic]*でよい。
  7. “That was refreshing me” —> “which felt really refreshing”
    • refreshing meは不自然。It was refreshingかIt felt refreshingを使う

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